You can read the first chapters right here. But before you do that, please read the rest of this post.
Writing is a queer institution. It is probably the most intensely personal thing you can do – it boils down to just the page and you. You then take this incredibly intimate thing that you have created by yourself and show it to the world. It’s a little perverse when you think about it. Anyway, I realize that feelings get pretty tied to writing. I sincerely hope that I am above such petty egoism and can handle criticism, but just in case you are not as sure as I am, gather.com is a good way to critique anonymously.
In order to vote you do have to register on the site which you can do right here. Yeah, I know this is bogus and a complete pain. I realize that time is valuable and all that jazz. You do not have to register to read my story, but if you take the time to go through chapter 1 (which is really the prologue and chapter 1 making it pretty long) I would really appreciate it if you took a few minutes to also register on the site and vote and/or comment on my work. Emails are okay too. I’m interested in feedback, even if all the feedback you give is a rating from 1-10, which is anonymous, would be nice. Also I need to say that I am interested in good and bad, so if you read it and it sucks rate it accordingly. I have a passing interest in winning this competition (truth be told the rules are a little nebulous and I may not even be able to win giving my living situation). Votes count towards you moving on. So if you are going to take the time to critique, again, voting would be nice.
And yes, the moment I put it up I noticed about a billion grammatical errors. Such is life. As Mark Twain once said, "I'd rather be locked in a room with a man who could tell a good story than a man who could spell." Needless to say, I'm working on the good story part.